HI bloggers this is my lock down writing and my main focus was to have punctuation marks and full stops. I've spent a lot of time on it and I really enjoyed making it. I hope you enjoyed it.
Hi Akindu, Good job! Now, because you have done such a good job I will have to be a bit harder on my comment. Your second sentence is a bit long. Where you have put "," it should have been "." That being said I enjoyed your story so maybe now you can look at putting in paragraphs. I know, it always seems to be something else but you have a great base knowledge so I know you will get there.
What a well written and detailed recount you have done. I hope you weren’t sick for too long. Lucky your mum was around, sometimes I wish I was a kid again so mum can look after me when I’m sick..
I think you did a good job with your full stops. But I feel like you may have been able to add a few more full stops or commas. Maybe try reading your writing out loud and see where you would need a breath
Hi Akindu,
ReplyDeleteGood job! Now, because you have done such a good job I will have to be a bit harder on my comment. Your second sentence is a bit long. Where you have put "," it should have been "." That being said I enjoyed your story so maybe now you can look at putting in paragraphs. I know, it always seems to be something else but you have a great base knowledge so I know you will get there.
Hey Akindu
ReplyDeleteWhat a well written and detailed recount you have done. I hope you weren’t sick for too long. Lucky your mum was around, sometimes I wish I was a kid again so mum can look after me when I’m sick..
I think you did a good job with your full stops. But I feel like you may have been able to add a few more full stops or commas. Maybe try reading your writing out loud and see where you would need a breath
Happy blogging!